Re-write! Re-Write!

Don’t read one of your grandmother’s old, boring love stories read this hot, daring, and juicy new book. About Odette’s struggles and disappointments that influences her to date only happily married men. Those who plan to stay that way. Men who only want discreet lust with no strings attach. At the same time Odette protects her heart .

When Wilhelm, the new UPS guy delivers to Odette’s office immediately the attraction between them creates fireworks.

Wilhelm is recently divorce and vows to sleep with as many women as possible to make up for lost time. He becomes obsess with making Odette one of his conquests but she continually rejects his flirting and continues her affairs with married men.

Can they overcome their walls of protection? Or will they fail to let their hearts submit to love?

I guess you guys are getting tired of my re-writes. I am too. What do you say about this one?

This Is It!!!!

Thank you to everyone who added their advice and tips. Here’s my latest what do you think? How can I make it better?

Don’t read one of your grandmother’s old love stories read this hot and juicy book.

Odette had more than her share of heartache. She decided to date only happily married men who planned to stay married. Just fun and games, no strings attached, protecting herself from heartache was her priority.

When Wilhelm, the new UPS guy delivers to her office attraction sparks between them. He was recently divorced and wanted with sleeping with as many women as he could to make up for lost time. He became obsessed with making Odette one of his conquests and she rejected he flirting.

Can they overcome their walls of self-protection? Or will they fail to let their hearts feel love?

Is this a Dedication Page or Speech

Do I need a dedication page for hidden temptation? I was thinking something like this.

 

When I start writing my dedication I would first dedicate to God after all without God I wouldn’t have the talent to write. Then I guess I should also dedicate to all my teachers and writers.

 

I really want to dedicate Hidden Temptation to everyone, my mother, my father, my grandmother, my aunts, uncles, brothers, and my sister, my son, my daughters, and their friends who call me mom and to my beautiful grandchildren.

 

I want to dedicate this book to all my friends past and present. Even to the folks I don’t like and the ones that don’t like me. There weren’t many friends or people I don’t like.

 

I would dedicate Hidden Temptation to my doctors who diagnosed me with all these illnesses I battle and the doctors that continued to keep me alive. I’ll add the nurses, CNA’s, and medical assistance that I’ve met on the way.

 

I would have to give a nod to the access-a-ride bus company and their drivers. Hell may as well thank NYC Mass transit. They’re the ones made it possible for me to get around. I should add the mail man who delivered my first two books.

 

To all the clerks that rang up my purchases, Amazon, Finger hut, and all the other companies that extended me credit and now have the bill collectors calling me. If I sell a lot you’ll get paid.

 

How about my old bartenders, then I may as well thank the drug dealers that made a lot of money off my cocaine appetite. Mustn’t forget the tobacco company, without you I wouldn’t have COPD.

 

Did I leave anyone out? What about all my former and present lovers. There might be one current lover but making it plural sounded more interesting.

 

I’m also dedicating Hidden Temptation to the sun, moon and stars. I’ll give a dedication to the ocean, the mountains, the birds, bees, the monkeys, giraffes, rhinoceros and iguanas and all the animal sea, and sky.

 

Thanks to my muse after all if it wasn’t for my muse there wouldn’t be anything to dedicate.

 

I wish to dedicate Hidden Temptation to all those who inspired me one way or another. It’s through meeting and experience conversations and observing that inspired me.

 

I know I’ll dedicate Hidden Temptation to me. Yeah that’s who. For all my undying devotion to complete what I started. Would that be narcissistic?

 

When you started your writing project did you have an idea who you were going to dedicate to? Who do you think deserves the dedication?